I actually like the idea of the different ranks of sponsors. It makes the event look that much more professional. It's perfectly in line with events like the Career Fair and other organizations on campus. I might eliminate the "undergraduate student" part of the letter since I don't think it adds any value to the letter. It seems much stronger to me to just say "writing to you as the President of the..."<br>
<br>My two cents.<br><br>Hope everyone's having a great summer!<br>Jacinda<br><br><div class="gmail_quote">On Thu, Jul 23, 2009 at 1:34 PM, Grace Lee <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:gracelee@mit.edu">gracelee@mit.edu</a>></span> wrote:<br>
<blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="border-left: 1px solid rgb(204, 204, 204); margin: 0pt 0pt 0pt 0.8ex; padding-left: 1ex;"><div>Hi guys,</div>
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<div>Could you look over the letter (attached) that I wrote, asking Shaws to be a sponsor of the 5K? I'm planning on sending similar letters to the other companies that we brainstormed would be good sponsors. I established different ranks of sponsors - I dunno if that's too blunt.</div>
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<div>Anyway, let me know your suggestions!</div>
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<div>Thanks :)</div>
<div>Grace</div>
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